Sunday, November 21, 2010

Pg128 essay first draft Tae Eun Kwon

Two different works of art ?Transformers & Iron Man

 

Bumble Bee, Tony Stark, Sam, Mark2. These are the names that you might have heard at least once, when the movies Transformer and Iron Man became a big hit around the world. Both were quite impressive that it was a hero movie but the heroes were not a human born with superpowers. They are alike in some ways but also are different in other ways.

 

Machines like robots are the heroes in both movies. In the Transformers, the robots are the intelligent life from the outer space in the shape of man-made machines, usually cars. Similarly Iron man is also a robotic hero which is a man wearing a high technology suit. Both movies are the typical hero movies, showing the good ones always defeat the bad ones in order to save the world. Transformers fight against the Decepticons and the Iron man beats the villain. Moreover, there's a beautiful woman who helps the main characters to accomplish their goals. They don't do a major task but they give the definite help when the hero is in danger. Also, they were both produced in comic books by Marvel Comics and the same production crew made both movies.

 

Although Transformers and Iron Man is similar in some ways, two have more contrasts than the similarities. As I mentioned before, the heroes are robots but Transformers are the ones from outer space. But Iron Man is a suit made by man and he is the hero. So the scale of the story is different since Transformers contains aliens and Iron Man covers the things that's in the Earth(even though it may be unrealistic). Also, in Transformers there is more than just one hero. A group of robots called the Autobots are one and the other one is a boy who is involved in the fight between the robots. In contrast, Tony Stark is the only hero in Iron Man. Furthermore, Transformers can change shapes to whatever they want, but Iron Man has only single designed suit. Also it is said that Iron Man is the richest hero ever, but the Autobots have no money or don't need any and the boy is just a boy.

 

   So Transformers is about alien robots and a boy fighting against other bad alien robots, while Iron Man is about defeating bad guys with a high-tech robotic suit. Both heroes are unique since it's not like the hero movies with super powered human. And because both movies have different aspects, each has its own entertaining elements.

3 comments:

  1. [Han soo jung]
    1. what i like about this piece of writing is the topic itself. I love both movies!
    2.your main point seems to be the similarity and contrasts between transformers and ironman.
    3.these particular words or lines struck me as powerful:Both heroes are unique since it's not like the hero movies with super powered human,because it is what they are and that takes the people's interest.
    4.these lines or parts could be improved:but the Autobots have no money or don't need and ,because I think this sentence can be a little awkward.
    5.the one change you could make that would make the biggest improvement in this piece of
    writing is.. I think this is enough! great topic!

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  2. 200903141 Sun Hoa Jung

    1. what i like about this piece of writing is : Topic itself. I haven't watched them, but from this writing I could understand the stories.
    2.your main point seems to be the difference and similarity about two different movies.
    3.these particular words or lines struck me as powerful: "Both were quite impressive that it was a hero movie but the heroes were not a human born with superpowers." it is good to explain difference first.
    4.these lines or parts could be improved: I think it's fine.
    5.the one change you could make that would make the biggest improvement in this piece of writing is : I think this writing is fine, about length of each pharagraph and contents.

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  3. [Seung Ah Lee]
    1. My favorite part in the writing is "there's a beautiful woman who helps the main characters to accomplish their goals." I couldn't agree more hehe :)
    2. Your main poin is that the two different movies- Transformers and Iron Man are similar but at the same time different.
    3. I liked the part where it says "but the Autobots have no money or don't need any and the boy is just a boy." It was expressed in a funny way!
    4. "They are alike in some ways but also are different in other ways." - this should be the thesis statement, but i think i would have been better if you clarified the first "They." Because in the previous sentence there are plural noun- heroes, so it might be a bit confusing.
    5. I suggest you to take a look at the conclusion. In the last paragraph, the first sentence does not seem to state your thesis exactly.

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