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Seoul and Busan
There are two big cities in Korea. One is Seoul and the other is Busan. Seoul is one of the biggest cities in the world. According to the Wikipedia, Seoul is the fourth largest city in the world. Busan is the second largest city and the most famous summer vacation spot in Korea. Busan has beautiful beaches which are Haewoondae and Gwananri. These two cities have a lot in common; however, there are also big differences between two cities. Seoul is the capital of Korea, which is the center of culture, economy, education, and politics. The most Korean major company's head offices are located in Seoul and there are most major universities, cultural facilities, the National Assembly, and almost every important things of the Korea. In addition to this, a quarter of entire populations of Korea live in the city, approximately more than 10,000,000 people. If there were not Seoul in Korea, Korea would be collapsed overnight because everything of Korea concentrates on Seoul. On the other hand, Busan is the center of international trade. Since Busan is located near the sea, there is big port in Busan. According to American Association of Port Authorities, Port of Busan is the fifth largest port in the world, when measured by container traffic. Thanks to the location, there are several beautiful beaches in Busan. Every single year millions of people enjoy their summer vacation there. According to a article, 800,000 people visited there a day. Similar to Busan, Seoul is also a very good tourist point because it has been the capital of Korea for 600 years so there are hundreds of traditional cultural assets such as Gyungbokgung, Changgyunggung, Duksugoong, Namdaemoon, DongDamoon, Jongmyo, and so on. Some of these cultural properties are designated as a World Heritage by UNESCO. Although there are no beach or sea, Seoul has one of the most beautiful river in the world. The river is Han river which is the rest area of Seoul citizen. The night sight of Han river is extremely fantastic. When I saw Seoul and Busan for the first time, I was amazed by their size and beautiful place. Now I have lived in Seoul four years; however, I still have many places where I want to go in Seoul and although I visited Busan once, I cannot help loving Busan. They are most important cities not only in Korea but also in the world.
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Monday, November 15, 2010
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[Tae Eun Kwon]
ReplyDelete1. Yes. There are two big cities in Korea. One is Seoul and the other is Busan.
2. They're all in one paragraph. The similarities and the contrasts.
3. Since there is one body paragraph, I can't really find what the topic sentence is.
4. Both cities are important cities with tourist points, but Busan has a beach near by while Seoul has a river instead.
5. I think it will be better if you divide the paragraph. I understand what you are trying to say but it's a bit hard to read^^;
6. Yes.
200903141 Jung Sun Hoa
ReplyDelete1. yes, Seoul and Busan
2. the thing we have to do is writing a three-pharagraph essay, so he write both comparison and contrast in one pharagraph.
3. actually, there is two topic sentences about similarity and difference between Seoul and Busan.
4. they are big, and important cities in Korea but they have different nature scenes.
5. actually, I wrote the two things in one pharagraph, because it's what we should do. but I think we could focus more on the similarity or difference.
6. I think he could use connectors more.
Seoul and Busan
ReplyDeleteThere are two big cities in Korea. One is Seoul and the other is Busan. Seoul is one of the biggest cities in the world. Seoul is the fourth largest city in the world. Busan is the second largest city and the most famous summer vacation spot in Korea. Busan has beautiful beaches which are Haewoondae and Gwananri. These two cities have a lot in common; however, there are also big differences between two cities.
Seoul is the capital of Korea, which is the center of culture, economy, education, and politics. The most Korean major company's head offices are located in Seoul and there are most major universities, cultural facilities, the National Assembly, and almost every important things of the Korea. In addition to this, a quarter of entire populations of Korea live in the city, approximately more than 10,000,000 people. If there were not Seoul in Korea, Korea would be collapsed overnight because everything of Korea concentrates on Seoul. On the other hand, Busan is the center of international trade. Since Busan is located near the sea, there is big port in Busan. According to American Association of Port Authorities, Port of Busan is the fifth largest port in the world, when measured by container traffic. Thanks to the location, there are several beautiful beaches in Busan. Every single year millions of people enjoy their summer vacation there. According to a article, 800,000 people visited there a day. Similar to Busan, Seoul is also a very good tourist point because it has been the capital of Korea for 600 years so there are hundreds of traditional cultural assets such as Gyungbokgung, Changgyunggung, Duksugoong, Namdaemoon, DongDamoon, Jongmyo, and so on. Some of these cultural properties are designated as a World Heritage by UNESCO. Although there are no beach or sea, Seoul has one of the most beautiful river in the world. The river is Han river which is the rest area of Seoul citizen. The night sight of Han river is extremely fantastic.
When I saw Seoul and Busan for the first time, I was amazed by their size and beautiful place. Now I have lived in Seoul four years; however, I still have many places where I want to go in Seoul and although I visited Busan once, I cannot help loving Busan. They are most important cities not only in Korea but also in the world.