To Make A Successful Relationship With People
"Human being is a social creature." This is what Aristotles said. And it is very true. Every day we make relationships with other peoples. Family, friends, colleagues, neighbors, and even slight ones like mailmen and securities; these are all relationships you make for your whole life. And there are two things to make this relationship successful and great: sincerity and consideration.
To make a relationship, the most important thing is sincerity. If you face people with a true heart, at first they may not face you truthfully, but finally they will realize your heart and do the same to you. Because they can feel that you are respecting them and have interests to them. So they decide to get close with you. But if you are acting dissemblingly, they will notice and won't be close to you. Sincerity works everywhere. Like in a speech, confession, or propose. This shows how important this is. And it is sure that it's a best way to get close to peoples.
Another thing is consideration. How do you feel when you see a selfish person? Does he look great because he has a perfect self-esteem? No, maybe. You might get tired and turn away from him. Same with this, if you don't think of others and just do what you want, you might have peoples around you, but really just "around" you. You are not making a good relationship. Think of others feelings first, and think how my actions will affect them. And they will do the same thing to you, too. Then this leads to a nice relationship without a conflict.
With these two things; sincerity and consideration, there will hardly have problems with making a relationship. It sounds very simple, but it is not very easy as we think. It takes time and effort to show these. But if these are understood, it lasts almost forever. So just show what's inside your heart. Then there will be always good peoples around you.
[Lee Su A]
ReplyDelete1. I like the most in your writing is the topic. I think one of the most important part in human-being is the realtionship between people because we are living in a society.
2. Your main point seems to be the way of making relationship with poeple successful and great.
3. These particular words or lines struck me as powerful: If you face people with a true heart, at first they may not face you truthfully, but finally they will realize your heart and do the same to you, because I couldn't agree more on that point.
4. These lines or parts could be improved: Cuase it's a four-paragraph essay, so I think there's a need to put some spaces between the two body paragraphs.
5. The one change you could make that would make the biggest improvement in this piece of writing is: I Think it's enough. But, I also would like to suggest that it's better to add some actions to make good relationship with people, not just mental things!
200903141 Jung Sun Hoa
ReplyDelete1. I like the topic you chose, because many people have difficulty treating people, and making relationship with people.
2. your main point is making a relationship with people.
3. " With these two things; sincerity and consideration, there will hardly have problems with making a relationship. It sounds very simple, but it is not very easy as we think. It takes time and effort to show these." I like these sentences, and really agree.
4. I think you use "peoples". you can use just "people", I think.
5. I think you could give your own example to make relationship with people.