p.67 first draft 200903141 Jung Sun Hoa
My Wonderful Teacher
I think I am so lucky that I have met nice teachers every time. But it is hard to keep in touch with all of them. Every year we all have to adopt ourselves to new circumstances – teachers to new students and students to new teacher and friends. As time goes by, the teacher or one student last year or more past would be forgotten easily. And just saying hello to each other also would become awkward thing actually. But I have the only one teacher who I keep in touch with very naturally until now.
I met her when I was a second grade in middle school. She was my class teacher and also an English teacher. First, as my English teacher, she made me take an interest in studying not only English but also all subjects. At that time, I was not a quite model student every teacher liked. I could not concentrate well during the class time, and I didn't do any homework. She suggested that I would be a class president and the head of English class. I accepted her suggestion and I just helped her for our class. From helping her, I developed my sense of responsibility. And I became interested in studying, knowing new things. So actually I graduated my middle school as a top student. Although she was not my class teacher in my third year in the middle school, she was really proud of me and truly congratulated me. Second, as my class teacher, she was another mother to me. Because of my father's business failure, my family had a really tough time during my middle school. So I became mature early and worried much about the future of my family. One day, my teacher asked me what the cause of my anxiety was. I wept with emotion and told all about my concerns. She patted me on the shoulder and hugged me. And she told me about her childhood in bad condition. She consoled me by saying it would be a strong foundation of my growth and become better soon. For two years – my second and third grades in middle school – she always took care of me. And even for three years in my high school, she sometimes called me first and encouraged me in studying hard to enter university. She was the one who felt so happy when I entered the university, HUFS.
About two years ago, she called me and said that she was in hospital. At that time I was in Busan, but she was in Seoul to get treatment. I was so worried and sad about her and the fact that I couldn't be with her. In the last time when I met her, she was okay but looked so weak. Actually I have not known what kind of illness she had because she hasn't wanted to tell me about that. I'm really happy that she came back to daily life and I only want her to return to good health. Although we can't meet often, our hearts to each other are and will be the same forever.
[TAE EUN KWON]
ReplyDeletewow it's really touchy. I think it's very nice of you two to keep in touch for such a long time, since it's a hard thing to do!:D
I think it would be better to read if it's divided into more than three paragraphs, but as it's a three paragraph essay^^;;
[Won Du Ho]
ReplyDeleteI was moved deeply by your story. You have a really wonderful teacher.
Your story is very touching so I read it with joy but your body paragraph is too long I think it will be better if you summarize your story a little bit.
200903141 Jung Sun Hoa
ReplyDelete-second draft "my wonderful teacher"
I am so lucky that I have always met nice teachers. But it is hard to keep in touch with all of them. Every year we all have to adopt ourselves to new circumstances – teachers to new students and students to new teacher and friends. As time goes by, the teacher or one student who was in the same class would forget each other easily. And just saying hello to each other also would become awkward thing actually. But I have one teacher who I keep in touch with very naturally until now.
I met her when I was a second grade in middle school. She was my English teacher. She made me take an interest in studying not only English but also all subjects. At that time, I was not a quite model student every teacher liked. I did not concentrate well during the class time, and I also did not do any homework. One day, there was no text book on my desk, and I just drowsed in the English class as usual. My teacher got upset with my attitude. She called me and made me awake. She said if I wanted to participate in the class, it would be okay to stand behind the classroom bring the text book, which could helped me to awake. But I didn’t do as she said. Only then did I take out my text book, and thumbed through the pages of the book insincerely. I didn’t mean to do that, but I began to sleep again. My teacher got really upset with me, and then she called me after class. I followed her to the teacher’s room as being half asleep. In the room, she let me sit down and stared at me. I expected her to give me a scolding, but she just asked my future – what I wanted to be. I had not thought of my future until then, so I could not answer her. She seemed to be quite surprised that I did not have any dream. After thinking for a little time, she suggested that I would be the head of English class. She tried to persuade me to be. After thinking for a quite long time, I accepted her suggestion. All I did as the head of English class was only to help her for our class. I set listening tapes, and handed out the materials she made for us. I could not sleep in the class at all, because most of the class time I had to stand beside her and help her. From helping her, I developed my sense of responsibility. And I became interested in studying, knowing new things. So actually I graduated my middle school as a top student. Although she was not my class teacher at that time, she was really proud of me and truly congratulated me.
When I entered the university, Hankuk University of Foreign Studies, I met and asked her why she suggested me the position. I suddenly wondered that why she picked me up even though there were so many students to drowse. She said she could see the possibility to do something from me. And she also said “look, you made it!” She truly congratulated me on entering the university, so my joy of that became doubled. I’m really happy that I met her and keep in touch with her like this.